Hello, i have started to write a book based on the sins universe i have posted the first chapter on my website just click the link and then click the tab at the top of the page that say Sins of a Solar Empire Fan-Fiction and you can then read the first chapter and leave feed back, which would be great but if you don't have any advice or constructive criticism please don't say anything
Thank you!
http://givemesomepienow.wix.com/solar-fan-fiction
Edit: Posted revised edition on chapter one, and chapter two will be done this week end
Edit#2: Posted rough draft for chapter 2 enjoy!
Edit#3: Chapter 3 is now done, it is still rough drafts o there will be minor changes enjoy!
Edit#4: Chapter 4 is finished, any ideas or critiques would be great!
Edit#5: Chapter 5 is now finished sorry for the stupidly long wait I will be writing more now! Please leave feedback if you want!
Edit#6: Chapter 6 is done more or less i need to look over it for typos and grammar but other than that it is done, it is a little short so that why it was done so fast but i hope you enjoy tell me what you think below!
Edit#7: Added more to chapter six felt it was lacking so go check it out!
Edit#8: Sorry for such a long break I had a huge case of writers block so i decided to take a break sorry for such a long break!
Edit#9: Chapter 8 is now done! WOO, tell me what you think!
After a long break i have started writing again. Chapter 5 is now up and I hope you guys like it, feedback would be awesome. And sorry for such a long break
Wow! I haven't gotten a chance to read it yet but thanks for coming back! I had assumed that you (like many others) had started a large project but just decided that it didn't hold your interest or something came up and you decided it just wasn't worth it. But... here you are with Chapter 5! Thank you!
Your welcome, I just needed to take a little break but now im back tell me what you think about chapter 5!
Chapter 6 is done I hope you guys like it tell me what you think!
I added more to chapter 6 i felt it was lacking so check up on what i added!
That was so quick I didn't even get a chance to read Chapter 5 before Chapter 6 came out! But now I have read both and I must say that the story is so much better than anything I could have made in a similar amount of time - I salute, you, givemesomepienow. I can't believe that you have written almost 100 pages of a "book" that will never earn you a penny! I feel like it is a gift to our relatively small community of loyal Sins players and I think that you deserve another karma.
Wait... I just looked at your karma and all of it so far has been given by me. And how do I have more karma than you when I haven't really done anything for the Sins community? Well, there was that whole collector's edition thing, but I really think that the folks at Stardock and Ironclad deserve the credit for that masterpiece of a collector's edition.
But you do deserve another bit of karma for coming back and making me feel like posting on these forums again. And for keeping your story varied and interesting. And now there are pirates! Will there be any pirate characters, I wonder? Perhaps some diplomacy between the TEC and the pirates or between the Vasari and the Advent?
And I found it funny how the Vasari take John away to fix him up but end up beating him up again.
IM BAAAAAAACK!!!!!!!!! lol but seriously i had a huge case of writers block and i just needed to take a break im sorry for such a long wait i promise it wont happen again but chapter 7 is up and i have a new website. the old one wasn't cutting it for me anymore so i go a new one! tell me what you guys think! also leave feedback on the story as well! Chapter 8 will probably be up around the 20th but defentaly before Christmas enjoy!
Glad you're back (nice site too, wix is quite easy when it comes to making sites, or so I believe). I look forward to reading the new chapter when it's released.
Chapter 8 is now done! WOO! What do you guys think?
It's lovely to read a book about your favorite game! And you done very good work, givemesomepienow! Bravo! Just this thing about the rebellion how it began on Advent and Vasari...
Could you elaborate?
I can try.
For me there is no really a different story how the Rebellion began on Advent and Vasari, it's just a copy 1by1 of the story of TEC. The Rebellion is something important and should be much much more then kiddish quarrels at the senate and few words. Let only TEC Rebellion begin from the senate, it's OK for them because people's governments are always full of intrigues, corruption and someone's interests. Advent Rebellion can begin as a feel of pain in the hearts of Advent followers, pain of the mass death of beloved sisters caused by the war. And because Advent followers are connected in mind each other, they feel everyone of them as a sister and love it truly. So with the strong power of Advent mind, they innovate the resurrection, but even as Advent is an UNITY, they split in two of should they resurrect or not, because it could be dangerous - lose of mind power(big damage reduction of Advent Rebels and culture weaken).
Personally, my take on the rebellion is as follows.
TEC - Rebels want to fight the aliens, loyalists want to ride out the fighting and persevere with minimal fighting
Vasari - Rebels don't think they are strong enough to fight the unknown enemy and want to ally with everyone to increase their odds of success, loyalists just want to keep running, they don't want to fight this unknown enemy if they can outrun it
Advent - Rebels don't believe their war with the Vasari is justified and that corruption within the Unity has led to their fighting two enemies when they really only have a quarrel with the TEC, loyalists simply want to destroy all who are in their way (kind of like TEC Rebels), especially the TEC
I'm not 100% sold on where these rebellions would originate (high up in the government, high in the military ranks or lower in the general population or amongst the lower ranking military personnel) but it can certainly be interpreted many ways.
Thanks for the feedback guys!
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