The front page still says that preordering will let you into the beta. Does that need updated?
Within the lore section:
On the "Of the cataclysm" page, the end of the sentence in the third paragraph "in which most of the magic in the world is now stored in." doesn't need the final "in." You could either delete the final "in" or change it more radically to read ", thus creating the shards that preserve the last of the world's magic."
Within the "Of the Fallen" section, second paragraph, "all together evil" should be "altogether evil" or "unredeemably evil".
Please take these suggestions as my attempt to be helpful. I'm a huge fan of Stardock's work. I'm not a very helpful beta tester because I don't have the time to tinker with the game enough to develop detailed reports of bugs, but I can write.
I'm hopeful that we'll see more of the game lore coming to the elementalgame site soon to create more interest in the game. The heroes in E:WoM bring the opportunity for much more involved storytelling than the relatively impersonal starships of GalCiv.
I'm not sure what the officials think. But I think pointing out typos found in the lore is something that somebody has to do and you've done a good job. I thank you for catching the often missed "ending sentence with preposition".
Which is a horrible lie perpetuated by high school English teachers who don't understand that English isn't Latin and that intelligent speakers don't always use adpositions prepositively.
(In this case, the 'in' is redundant, so removing it is a good idea.)
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Preposition_and_postposition
I've always tended to avoid ending sentences in a preposition where at all reasonably possible but generally let it slide in cases where the language simply becomes too stilted. I can't for the life of me think of a good example off the top of my head but I expect that I'll remember this the next time I struggle to avoid it.
But this does remind me of a joke.
A new freshman from Texas approaches a Harvard upperclassman and asks "can you tell me where Harvard Square is at?”
The upperclassman responds "at Harvard we don't end our sentences in prepositions."
To which the freshman replies "OK, can you tell me where Harvard Square is at, asshole?"
The Lore section typos have been fixed. The homepage has also been updated to more accurately reflect Elemental's current beta status. Thanks for pointing them out.
Bara
Hahahahahaha, nice. Funny as hell.
I failed to mention that the Lore main page has the same text as the the Of the Cataclysm page, so the final "in" needs fixed there as well.
@Mumblefratz - I love that joke. I use prepositions to end sentences all the time when speaking, but now I always smile when I notice myself doing it because I mentally append "asshole" to the end of the sentence.
@GunslingerBara - Great avatar. The Gunslinger books are wonderful.
Fixed too. And thank you
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