I'm now working on the ninth chapter.
wow.
this is amazing.
KEEP GOING!
Good, but what the heck? Flaming Ninjas?
nice, but what year should we even stop?
we?
And I would assume that the 1000 years of peace and prosperity would start around 2800 and the Vas would find us around 3800, but that's just me... (Maybe because its around 3800 that a war occurs in my book...)
This is being adapted from RP fluff I'm currently writing on another forum; some of it might not make sense.
The Undying.
3800?
Come on, I've got a timeline to incorporate new races into Sins, and the Vasari invaded around the turn of the 512th century (51,104 AD to be precise), with the Advent coming 10 years later, Entrenchment popping up 5 years later, and then going 51,125 AD.
With the amount of technology seen in the Sins universe, I'd estimate somewhere past the 20th millenium to be an early date for invasion.
Yeah..
And I doubt it... Once people can traverse space quickly, we are going to have colonies springing up everywhere. And besides, if it really was that far in the future, humans would no longer look like we do now. We would have modified our genome to become more efficient, stronger, faster, and smarter. Not to mention the fact that you would have countless subspecies by that time... In my book, there are just a couple already:
Aeros: Self-engineered to have wings. Although still looking like normal human beings for the most part, to someone unaware of their nature, they could be mistaken for angels due to their odd anatomy. Their ships are very open and do not have gravity dampeners in them allowing them to fly with little effort. Most were eradicated during the Holocaust.
Hydros: Engineered to gain the ability to breathe underwater, these look the most different of any species in the Homo genus. Though they do not have scales, they do lack hair and nearly all appendages are webbed to increase hydrodynamics. All but a single line were killed in the Holocaust, forcing them to change again and they now have the ability to breathe both air and water.
Soles: Designed for those lonely outpost jobs, these are not always considered people. They distance themselves from others and it is a wonder that these ever managed to not die out due to a lack of procreation. They are very independant, but also very calm and are not easily startled. Some were used as snipers and others to man turrets in the first stages of the Holocaust, but by the end, Homo soles became extinct.
Extuli: A race that is the only one that has always been capable of breeding with sapiens, this race is not a drastic change in any manner, but rather an improvement in nearly every category. Extuli learn faster and tend to have more rational judgement than their sapiens counterparts. In addition, they were adapted to be superior in battle, but with the invention of Breaker Drives, their individual combat abilities became useless, but were used as spies thereafter. Extuli are famous for the benevolent Crueshet dynasty that controlled the Human Empire from 2834 to 3451. An odd characteristic is that most members of the race have last names beginning with "Crue." Although the Human Empire fell as the United Human Federation rose, its members were still respected in the following government and held high places therein. Upon the United Human Republic's attempt to stop the Holocaust, all members of the extuli race were drafted, leading to a large number of their people dying. Although they blame the UHR for this, they do not voice their opinions as they feel it would only serve to cause more death. Of those that are left, few family lines are pure. In recent years, a Voltaire Cruelerz has come to the public eye for sacrificing his life to end the Dawn War. Despite his being 75% sapiens, he is still considered by humanity to be the classic example of an extuli: a wise, benevolent person who is willing to sacrifice themselves for the sake of others.
Well, if you ever wondered where my username came from, there is your answer. The point is though, for only having sapiens, Sins would have to be in the relative near future. If there were others, they would be mentioned. In fact, it appears that the Unity may be another member of the Homo genus, but their experiments were too foreign to sapiens and were expelled. If they were the first (which it certainly sounds like), this would possibly even place sins in the mid 3000's. And that is why I say that.
Note: Expulsion from a planet would only be a real problem pre-phase travel as that would mean long trips and those that left would likely never see the location of their childrens' homes. This means that the Advent were likely expelled somewhere between 2400 and 2800 if you wanted something else to support my theory...
can we get a taste of this?
You just did... In reality, Dawn War: Nightfall (first of three book in series) won't be done for a while... Once I get done typing it, you are actually one of the few people I might actually have review/edit it. I tend to leave out commas like you wouldn't believe when writing fiction, so that needs to be fixed...
But I'll give you some background info on each of the main characters/places.
Dr. Nicholas Tesla (unrelated to Nicola): Owner of the company Tesla Spark Industries, former UHR President, and current UHR Senator. This man is rich, powerful, eccentric, and a bit arrogant. (Although that is justified given his fortune which happens to be the largest in history and his intellect which guess what? He happens to have the highest IQ in recorded history.) Although seemingly a combination of the Archetypal rich guy and genius, he is far from that. At the beginning of the story, it appears to be that way, but throughout the books (and especially Dawn War: Daybreak) he becomes a character with far more depth as you learn his motives. Although, his motives are never truly explained unless you read what will be the prologue: Holocaust. Holocaust is solely about Tesla during the time of the United Human Federation (similar to the TO I suppose...) and the Holocaust. The book is divided into three parts: Innocence, Exposure, and Response. Innocence is his youth to his first century (the guy lives past 700, what do you expect?) and also has a bit of a love story in it. Exposure is the beginning of the Holocaust, which is a period in which 70 billion people die. It also sees humanity fall into chaos as the UHF falls apart. Without an organized force to defend itself, world after world is exterminated. Eventually, the only worlds left are those within the "Great Trigon." By means that I can't explain because it would ruin the entire series for you, the GT protects the core worlds from that which causes the Holocaust. However, one of the three things that form it fails and must be restored. This sees the creation of a fleet of planet-sized ships called the Olympus Fleet. Within this are: Tri-Star Destroyer (critical in the plotline of the series), Hercules Battleship, Providence Carrier, and the flagship Trinity Blade (of which Tesla is the captain.) In a conclusive battle, the Olympus Fleet defeats its foes (in case you haven't figure it out, I'm not telling you who or what they are...) However, the Trinity Blade is destroyed and Tesla is stuck into cryostasis and is discovered two centuries later by a merchant vessel.
Dr. Brandon Tesla: Nicholas's father, he is very similar to Nicholas in many ways. Upon Jacob's death, Tesla Spark is handed to his son. (By the way, it is Jacob's father who starts TS.)
Jacob Johnson: new soldier that shows a talent for battle. He sees his first action in a city called Phoenix (which ironically is on an ice planet). Good friend of Volt.
Jane Willoshire: Girlfriend of Volt.. Or she was... Until she died... (she dies before Nightfall takes place during the Civil War) Volt never quite recovers from the death of his fiance...
Blair Natek: leader of a secret UHR department. Oh, and they guy is corrupt...
Ashley Marksman: UHR President, and Ashley is a guy... Weird name (for the current generation, but Ashley used to be a guy's name), but all the same, he's a guy...
G-4 Z-127/Jarvis: Nicholas's personal robotic butler. He was originally designed for a far different purpose, but after failing at that, Tesla couldn't stand to destroy his creation that had taken him three decades to complete.
G-4 Z-128/Zakodrakah: Zako was built to fill the role that Jarvis failed at. Unfortunately, he worked a little too well. He is the one that begins the Dawn War. I can't tell you more or it would spoil a lot of stuff...
G-4 Z-129/Trigon: Meant to fill the role left by the now defective Great Trigon, this robot is built with the sole purpose of defeating its predecessor.
G-5 Z-130: Classified.
Miron: Planet owned by the head of Aurora Corporation, the seconds largest company in existence and owner of the coveted Life Generation System. The LGS is the only computer in the galaxy that can create a virtual ecosystem based on a planet and then synthesize all life forms. From there, the newly created animals/plants/bacteria are shipped to the planet and released. Among other things though, Aurora Corp also produces more than 75% of the UHR's warships (which is of course their primary source of income).
Hadras: Arguably the most beautiful planet in existence, Hadras is owned by Terra Corp. which specializes in Terraforming worlds. The planet is very odd in that it has a gravitational field that fluctuates slightly by the day for unknown (to you that is, not to me) reasons.
Xavios: Owned exclusively by Nicholas Tesla, Xavios is the runner up as far as beautiful planets go. The population is a mere 1023, but its economic influence as the headquarters of the massive company, Tesla Spark gives it sway over every other planet in the galaxy. You cannot simply move to Xavios, you have to be a family member of someone on the board of TS, or you have to be a good friend of Tesla. A really good friend of Tesla... Scans of the planet by an anonymous person indicate that the planet's core appears to be porous. When asked about it, Tesla denied the existence of such a thing. According to Tesla, the ground is perfectly solid beneath their feet and is "the most sturdy ground you will ever walk on" (which makes sense once you know the secret of Miron, Hadras, and Xavios. And trust me, its a big one...)
Tehkratt: The largest solid planet ever discovered, this planet is only about 10 lightyears from Hadras. Tehkratt is used as the mine during the construction of the Olympus Fleet. The planet also plays a significant role during the Dawn War as well.
Voltaire Alexander Cruelerz: Winner of the Medal of Hope (which was commissioned in his honor post-mordom.) Volt begins life humbly on a terran planet and meets his fiance there while studying for his doctorate in nanomedicine (who says main characters can't be smart?) However, the UHR sends out a call to everyone under the age of 50 (which is the equivalent to today's 21) that within six months, there is a 75% chance that all will be drafted in one massive surge of troops. Jacob enlists to go to an ice planet no one would ever think of going to. Because he doesn't want his best friend on a giant snowball without anyone he knows, Volt also enlists, determined to finish his doctorate while he is there, which he does. Although he would have finished before the 6 month period, making him exempt from the draft, he goes anyways. Jacob and Volt see action there due to a giant ocean of hydrogen that was discovered beneath the surface ice. When the rebels attempt to take it, Volt sacrifices himself to save the general there who then leads a counter-attack on the rebels. Volt eventually wakes up only to discover his body is now more than half metal. Due to his heroics in war, his injuries came to the attention of Tesla who treats Volt personally. After recovering, Volt is invited to stay on Tesla's Grand Estate (which btw takes up one of the continents on the planet). Tesla slowly introduces him to things that the UHR has long wanted hidden. Slowly, he goes through the story of the Holocaust until he finishes one day at an elevator. Now this elevator is a very special elevator for reasons I will not explain, but after going down it, they find a lab which is floating inside a vacuum chamber and surrounded by a disintegration field. Inside, Volt sees the most advanced object ever created: G-4 Z-129. At this point, Volt is relayed the information about 128 and that there will soon be a war. This war will be unlike anything ever seen and will likely claim more lives than the Holocaust did. With the disorganization of the UHR after the civil war, it would be a very soft target for 128. This war would come to be known as the Dawn War.
Pretty good, and probably not too far as to what would happen. I don't like the idea of dismissing the "force fields" as irrelevant though
i shivered a couple of times during that. I also really like how i might be someone you'll let read this over, it means a lot. But im gonna read this no matter what. ill break into ur home for it. ILL DO ANYTHING. but im gonna read it.
and i also smiled at Ashley Marksman. Marksman means something special to me, cant explain, sry, and thats why in Sinners Marksmen are like supersoldiers. but anyway, love anything that has the name Marksman. and i liked all of this very, very much. did i say i would kill to read this? i dont think so, so ill say it twice. I WILL KILL TO READ YOUR SERIES.
Hang on, you're not trying to divert attention away from the OP are you? If so, the whole Dawn War series doesn't really belong in front of someone else's idea, does it?
No, I'm not, you may continue uninterrupted.
@guywhoyoudontknow: If you want to speak of the matter more, just PM me.
Thank you.
Force fields didn't have any applications in the military, where it was proposed, because laser weapons had not been invented at the time.
The ninth chapter is nearing completion.
Chapter IX, 2231 - 2242
The ninth chapter in the saga. The Empire of Kyogre launches sudden and unprovoked attacks on Foyde and Centalon IV, leading to a culturally devestating Imperial campaign using superior laser technology. The CDS is pressured to produce an industrial shield generator in time to halt their advance.
I've got such a huge story arc to cover, I won't be stopping here. Expect a tenth chapter sometime next week.
You should write a book. The histories of Advent, the Varssri, and the Tech rofl. All three seperate books, like history books rofl
Speak of the Devil, I was going to start a novel. I could say this is a valid advert... so here's a link to something you may be interested in.
http://multiverseroleplaying.freeforums.org/stars-of-steel-ooc-t107.html
Chapter X, 2243 - 2271
The tenth chapter in the saga. The First Hyperspace War ends with the capture of Kandal and Kyogre's 'suicide attempt', and a new phase of galactic expansion is opened in the form of the 3rd Sphere. This chapter chronicles how the CDS became so Western in culture.
I have to make a comment about the early years, mostly about the Chinese managing to make a gauss weapon before anyone else. I understand the authors need for China to have some kind of competent space faring weapon to be developed by the Chinese, but I think Gauss weapons would be a poor choice due to the fact that in real life the US has already developed railgun technology to the point that the US Navy has test fired a rail weapon just a few years ago. The fact it was an open test just means that the technology was in development well before that, it makes no sense that in your story China would miraculously be able to develop a similar weapon several years later and they would be the only ones capable of using it.
True, but I'm exactly not following human history like a saint. It can also be said that the Law of Accelerating Returns would make technological development so rapid that this timeline would not be able to comprehend it.
@Rumtiger: not exactly... You need to understand that Guass Cannons/Coilguns and Railguns are NOT the same thing. We have built railguns yes. But Gauss Cannons have also been built and should a power source be found, they would be used as the next weapon for the Army...
Precisely. Gauss weapons could phase out bullets, while rail weapons fire projectiles at high velocity.
No they couldn't... They just fire things...
Well, yeah, of course they do. They could fire a projectile at escape velocity.
this is quite remarkable; a great work of imagination. i am looking forward to reading more updates.
now if only i could do this for my book... any suggestions onhow to tackle a timeline?
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