The font isn't large, it's the browser you're using.  It comes out fine in Google Chrome.  Firefox does have an issue with the oversizing though.

Go ahead and try to publish it, but I doudt stardock or iron clad will let you  People could just go to this site to get the story

WHAT?

BACK! i should be around a computer with internet for the rest of the summer, so id expect random updates throughout the rest of the month. once school starts up again, idn. but for now, lets see if i can clear up a few things.

the Vasari are going to have a much larger role in the coming part. i didnt really mention this, but the Mani'k core of the Vasari armies is like that one tight-ass unit the young soldier always aspires to get into. and theyr wicked evil and wicked good at fighting. like 3 Marksmen in one Mani'k soldier. so wait for that.

The Vasari names from the game are just the ships, not the actual people running them. But I get what you're saying. I didn't stress enough that when the Jackal was traveling to the areas of conflict the Vasari were overriding the human race, but I'm going to fix that in my rounds of editing and review. Finally, the TEC didn't call them the Advent 1,000 years ago, but that doesn't mean the Advent didn't call themselves that. Remember, the TEC never communicated with the society of deviants, they just expelled them. Gives me some wriggle room there.

I think you should extend the first Vasari part cause its awesome!

P.S. Are we gonna find out about whats chasing the Vasari?

Its been very good so far, you just need some more character development (i.e. Archie Kol), as well as how the Vasari, TEC, and Advent societies work as a whole. With a few minor additions and the editing, it will become a very good story.

part 2 should be more in-depth. i might abolish 3-part chapters and just make one big normal chapter. plus, in my revision checks, i will be making major changes to some of the chapters to provide more information and make them more realistic.

sorry, i type it in size 14 font, and this is what 14 is here. just get used to scrolling, thats all i can say. or wear sunglasses. sorry i cant be of more help.

Phew! Finally finished the thing. I liked it as a fan fict but if you're seriously considering having this published, it'll need some work.

First I need to address my concern with the pace of the story. You seem to being at one, and it is very fast. Slow things down a bit, and try to even intervals of relative tranquility followed by acceleration. Do this and your story won't wear out the reader till they're numb by the time they get to the good stuff.

Second is the unorginality of the characters. Sure archtypes are good when you're doing something simple or a comedy but from what I can tell you're trying to create a drama. My tip is to spend some time thinking of how to make lead characters stand out before you commit them to the story. For example make the Vasari leader truly alien, perhaps having his entire spiel be through non-verbal senses and actions. A slight tremor in some part of his carapace might mean outrage for example.

I'd like to also point out the danger of what you're doing with Kol by making him a supersoldier. With that you run the risk of creating an object rather than a character. This is done so by making him super powerful and in some ways ungodly. The more screen time your characters have the more flawed, and therefore interesting they should be. Your character Zeke is step in the right direction, so you should draw off that experience when refining your leads.

One finale point on the characters is to give them unfamiliar is readible names. This helps smooth over reader misidentification with unrelated individuals. For help just get a baby book for names and look for something you can say with ease but is one you know little people to have.

Getting back to my main concerns is number three, which is a deep universe. With most fan fictions you have one already, but with sins all we have is the stuff in the manual, lore, and into. This means you're going to have a lot of work on you're hand describing the universe around your characters. They're going to have to decent descriptions too as the better they are, the more the reader can connect. You get what I'm saying? Reading you're story though good, left me with no idea on you're interpretation of the literal sin's universe.

All in all your story is good but has a lot of room for improvement. Please don't let my harsh words discourage you. The more you write, the better you get.

just to add something to keep everyone entertained, i started a different post to play a sort of mind game with the Sins community, and I couldn't help but push Sinners into that as well. and then I went ahead and put in a major spoiler/teaser for late part 2-early part 3. a humungous climax point in sinners. go ahead and check it out HERE!

can u copy an example for me? i dont understand.

I watching the intro today instead of usually skipping it and noticed something wrong with you story. Wasn't kol's son born the year the vasari invaded? Or are disregarding that and making cool a totally different guy than the man in the intro? Smiles make everything better!