Sinners
***Sinners has been discontinued. See last page for details.***
Sinners is currently (as of Febuary 15)...172 pages!
Part 2 HAS BEGUN! Here's the teaser for those of you who haven't seen it yet, or would like to be reminded of what's to come.
Part 2: Destruction
Teaser
Kol:
captured by the vicious Mani'k, can Kol escape from the Vasari before he himself is turned into one of the Vasari? And even if he can manage to escape, the Guild of Marksmen is out there, looking for him...
Archie:
Sent back to his home planet to solve a streak of murders committed by a close friend, will he join the murderer? Or will he pay the ultimate sacrifice?
Zeke:
Forever battling for control of his body, Zeke's psionic powers are growing stronger, and Alfr'eda is growing frightened. Can a Silent One rejoin the Unity? What would that mean for her? In the meantime, there are Sinners to purge. But her next target may be the most difficult and dangerous yet....The Prime Chancellor himself.
Jessica:
After the great Admiral Kol mysteriously disappears, Jessica steps up to pick up the empty seat of power. But others want the coveted Admiral position as well, and they will stop at nothing to get it. Does the "female Kol" have what it takes to reach Admiralty without the powers of a Marksman? Or will she just be a listing in the number of dead as the contestants fight to the death--for some of them--literally?
Veronica:
Her power taken away "indefinitely" by Haiti, she is forced to hide herself as one of the Vasari's Mani'k. Will her loyalty to the Unity remain strong enough to do what she must with the human prisoner? Or will she help Kol escape to rebel against Haiti in the only pitiful, desperate way she can? And if she aides the terran, will Kol return the sympathy or will he himself capture her?
Agent Karridan:
An Advent spy sent to the Trader worlds to discreetly scout out psionically-active humans that could be spared the destruction of the Reemergence, he hears rumors of a mysterious and deadly killer, and finds himself strangely intrigued. Sneaking into a recent crime scene, Karridan notices a faint psionic residue, and immediately stashes himself in Archie Kol's team as they hunt the murderer. The resulting explosion when he comes into contact with Zeke and Alfr'eda? A thousand suns undergoing supernova will not compare.
Professor Newman:
Working himself near to exhaustion, trying furiously to complete his project before command shuts him down, Newman is running out of time. For himself and for the TEC. Will he succeed? Welcome to the Novalith Project.
Sinners on Blogspot:
http://cisinners.blogspot.com/
As a first-time visitor of this thread to see what the post count is all about, what I have to say on immediate gut reaction is this:
I would have read this if the font weren't so incredibly overlarge. If it's quality, it doesn't need the emphasis.
Apologies, but I'm not a fan of being shouted at to gain my attention. That, plus some of the "teaser" statements at the end of the OP that indicate the next chapter will make me pretty much orgasm, make it difficult for me to minimize the response to the egotistical stylings and give it an honest critique. I feel like I'm being treated like a seven-year-old, and I really don't appreciate it.
Until that's corrected, a distinct NO for "publishing", whatever that means.
Dont criticize it if u havent read it.
what makes you think you're being treated as a seven year-old?
This
Story
Is
Awsome!!!!
Retroboy... grow up. You don't like a font size, so you slam the entire piece?
You don't want to be treated like a 7 year old, but you're whining like one.
Change your name to Retroman and grow up for gods sake!!!!
that a yes for publishing?
Yes
Sin On
sad, sad day. i think im heartbroken. Just look at what the bug did to chapter 1...\
EDIT: fixed
Retroboy
Dude, you are the only one that is complaining about the large font, really it just makes it easier to read, i mean i personally like the large font, and before you comment about the teasers or make opinions about publishing the story , read the story, and stop acting like a seven year old if you don't want to be treated like one
and guywhoyoudon'tno, i already voted for the publishing thing(it was a yes) so don't count me twice ( you could if you wanted to though...lol)
haha
for the sweet icon
LALALALA... OH MY GOD. ITS, ITS PIE!!!!
Just kidding. Got a little bored right there. I miss this story
Really awsesome story, there are some brilliant ones out there! this is 1 of 3 im following and i really need a new chapter this is AWESOME
Great story. a yes for publishing from me
yes to publishing! I love the first part with the Vasari!
I would say yes for publishing but.... i would lose sinners!
great stroy tho keep it up
oh well... thats a yes from me anyway
no posts for a while
or updates no rushing its just a really good story
You've got my vote
in the Multiplayer Community i am known as Vasari Emperor and i command you to write more Vasari storys!!!!
or i will send the imperial gaurd after you and the grammar police.... dont make me do it!!!
lol
Tsurani
damn i need a crown or Vasari emoticon
wher did you get that smiley!?
i cant find it ....
Great story! Just a few things I found unbelievable as per Sins Lore...
1. The Vasari names I'm acquainted from the game itself don't sound like Flankx or Aeb'hir or Vorg. Maybe something like Jikantrus or Korlas... just throwing that in.
2. The TEC formed when the Trade Order was close to being wiped out by the Vasari and especially after, according to the Sins intro movie, "the Aluxian Dynasty fell."
3. Also, the Advent called themselves the Advent "now", not 1,000 years ago when the Trade Order first made contact with that "sinful society of deviants".
Don't get me wrong here: I LIKE this a lot. It's just what this franchise/IP needs: more backstory and depth to the Sins universe (pun intended). I just think that a few touchups here and there wouldn't hurt, either.
Keep up the good work!
I got it from another website
damn
by the way i dont get the Pun... im lousy at that
The universe of a franchise is just everything that makes up the franchise, and it includes the story, the games, the characters... everything. Since this game is about conquering large portions of the unknown universe, the pun is right there.
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